The bar chart compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
Looking from an
overall
perspective, the Linking Words
percentage
of Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
mothers
spent dressing and doing Use synonyms
homework
with their children was greater than that of Use synonyms
fathers
, Use synonyms
while
father’s Linking Words
time
spent playing games and preparing for Use synonyms
beds
was relatively higher than the other Fix the agreement mistake
bed
figures
. In terms of Use synonyms
both
, the majority of their Use synonyms
time
was spent Use synonyms
on
doing Change preposition
apply
homework
with their children.
The Use synonyms
percentage
of Use synonyms
time
spent on dressing of Australian Use synonyms
mothers
accounted for 70% which was higher than that of Use synonyms
fathers
with 20% and Use synonyms
both
with less than 10%. Use synonyms
Moreover
, the proportion of Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
mothers
spent Use synonyms
on
doing Change preposition
apply
homework
was a great deal more than that of Use synonyms
fathers
. Actually, these Use synonyms
figures
were found to be 60% and 30%, respectively. Use synonyms
Additionally
, the Linking Words
percentage
of Use synonyms
both
spent on doing Use synonyms
homework
with their offspring was approximately 10%.
Turning to the other Use synonyms
figures
, despite being higher than the Use synonyms
percentage
of Use synonyms
both
parents’ Use synonyms
time
(10%), the proportion of Use synonyms
mothers
' Use synonyms
time
for playing games with their children made up nearly 30% which was less than that of Use synonyms
fathers
with 70%. Admittedly, the Use synonyms
percentage
of Use synonyms
fathers
’ Use synonyms
time
spent Use synonyms
on
preparing for beds was slightly higher than the corresponding figure for Change preposition
apply
mothers
. These Use synonyms
figures
were about 50% and just 45%, in that order. The Use synonyms
percentage
of Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
both
parents spent preparing for beds was inconsiderable with just less than 5%.
games with their offspring with 70%, followed by preparing for a sweet dream with 40%. Use synonyms
Subsequently
, the proportion of Linking Words
fathers
' Use synonyms
time
Use synonyms
spending
Replace the word
spent
for
Change preposition
on
homework
-related Use synonyms
activity
made up 30%. Fix the agreement mistake
activities
Finally
, the lowest Linking Words
time
Use synonyms
alloted
by male parents was changing their kids' clothes, at 20%.Correct your spelling
allowed
allotted
allocated
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