The bar chart compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
Looking from an
overall
perspective, the percentage
of time
mothers
spent dressing and doing homework
with their children was greater than that of fathers
, while
father’s time
spent playing games and preparing for beds
was relatively higher than the other Fix the agreement mistake
bed
figures
. In terms of both
, the majority of their time
was spent on
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homework
with their children.
The percentage
of time
spent on dressing of Australian mothers
accounted for 70% which was higher than that of fathers
with 20% and both
with less than 10%. Moreover
, the proportion of time
mothers
spent on
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homework
was a great deal more than that of fathers
. Actually, these figures
were found to be 60% and 30%, respectively. Additionally
, the percentage
of both
spent on doing homework
with their offspring was approximately 10%.
Turning to the other figures
, despite being higher than the percentage
of both
parents’ time
(10%), the proportion of mothers
' time
for playing games with their children made up nearly 30% which was less than that of fathers
with 70%. Admittedly, the percentage
of fathers
’ time
spent on
preparing for beds was slightly higher than the corresponding figure for Change preposition
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mothers
. These figures
were about 50% and just 45%, in that order. The percentage
of time
both
parents spent preparing for beds was inconsiderable with just less than 5%.
games with their offspring with 70%, followed by preparing for a sweet dream with 40%. Subsequently
, the proportion of fathers
' time
spending
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spent
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on
homework
-related activity
made up 30%. Fix the agreement mistake
activities
Finally
, the lowest time
alloted
by male parents was changing their kids' clothes, at 20%.Correct your spelling
allowed
allotted
allocated
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