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The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the number of membership details
about
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male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, the highest proportion of males were having gym memberships and
having
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 huge changes in the given periods.
To begin
, the first four years
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of mens
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mens
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means
men
 were greater than women's
subscription
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subscriptions
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 in 1980 around 2000. It rose steadily to 4000 and
womens
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women
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 were at 8000.
Whereas
, the next five years the growth of men's Were fell to approximately 1500, at the same time
womens
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women
 took the lead in 1995 at around 3000.In the year
of
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2000 both
the
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genders were similar around 2400. The next three terms drastically increased the gens gym membership in 2005, and ladies were moderate around 2800. Meanwhile,looking at the period of 2010 there was a dramatic decline for gents approximately 5000 and ladies
were
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slightly decreased
at
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to
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 around 2000.
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