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The graph below shows the numbers of overseas visitors who went to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the numbers of overseas visitors who went to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the figures
of
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for
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 foreign travellers,
seperated
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separated
 by three different locations, between 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, there was a general increase in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who travelled to the coast and the mountains from 1987 to 2007.
However
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, the pattern is different for the lakes. From the
graph
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 we can see that there was an upward trend for the
number
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 of travellers who to the coast from 38000 in 1992 to 75000 in 2007;
similarly
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, the
number
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 grows steadily in the
moutains
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mountain
 category which increase
15000
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to 15000
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visitors
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 in 20 years. The exception to
this
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 general trend upwards was in the
laske
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last
 category after 2002. In 2002, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who travel to the lakes gave the highest with nearly 73000 and
this
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fall
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fell
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 dramatically to 50
millions
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million
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 in 2007.
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, the coast displayed a slight
dectrease
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decrease
 of 3000
visitors
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 between 1987 and 1992.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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