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The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Makecomparisons where relevant. UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007

The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Makecomparisons where relevant. UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007
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The given line graph illustrates the measurement of UK
acid
rain
 emissions in millions of
tonnes
, from four energy sectors namely domestic,
transport
 and
communication
,
gas
electricity
 and
water
 supplies and other industries from 1990 to 2007. It is noticeable that at the onset of the period, the
gas
,
electricity
 and
water
 supply experienced by far the most increase
of
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acid
rain
 emissions and saw
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a drammatic
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drammatic
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dramatic
 decrease despite some fluctuations
as well as
other
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the other
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 three sectors
also
 went through falls during
seventeen
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the seventeen
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 years. In 1990, household supplies with
gas
,
elecrticity
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electricity
 and
water
 and
transport
 and
communication
 contributed to
acid
rain
emission
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emissions
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 with large
tonnes
 above 3 and 2
mln
 respectively. In spite of stable emissions of
transport
 and
communication
,
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the gaz
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gaz
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gas
,
electricity
 and
water
 supply sector emitted more than two
mln
tonnes
 of
acid
rain
 in 1993.
Gas
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The gas
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,
electricity
 and
water
 supply sector went down and produced almost 1.5
mln
tonnes
 of
acid
rain
 and fluctuated during a decade and decreased by nearly a
mln
 tonn of
acid
rain
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
transport
 and
communication
 witnessed a
drammatic
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dramatic
 decrease and emitted
acid
rain
nearly
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of nearly
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 1.25
mln
tonnes
 in 2007. Other industries and domestic
emission
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emissions
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 of
acid
rain
 were the lowest
prodution
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production
 in 1991. Other industries emitted
increasingly
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increasing
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acid
rain
 until 1993 and overtook the amount of household supply emission in 2003 and reached the highest
emisson
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emission
emissions
 of
acid
 in 2007.
Domestic
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The domestic
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 sector decreased
in
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by
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 almost 250
tonnes
 of
acid
rain
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words acid, rain, tonnes, transport, communication, gas, electricity, water, mln with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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