If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to dramatically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

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At present, the Earth is experiencing numerous problems. There are a number of reasons why and it is believed that changing one's lifestyle will solve the current issues. In

this

essay, I will talk about my opinion regarding

this

subject.

To begin

with, our way of life is always changing, we always adapt to what is new.

With the

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increasing number of car users, it

also

added to the present problem of air pollution. If only people

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consider using public transport, it

will

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definitely lessen the air pollutants

as well as

traffic.

In addition

, it is undeniable that citizens are fond of using plastic bags and other plastic products. These things are believed to be the number one contributor

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. With

this

issue, the government made ordinances to use paper bags or eco bags on particular days to help lessen the use of the said product.

Also

, there are a lot of organizations that help people be educated about recycling. Like making a pillow out of junk food containers, or making use of an empty soft drinks bottle as an ornament in the house. To end, we owe to our Mother Earth the good things we see and experience. It is our responsibility to take care of it. The future generation depends on what we do now. Let us help them have a life or an even better life than we are experiencing now.

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current situation on our planet is an eye-opener that we need to move and do something in order for us to save and restore what is left.

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task response

The essay addressed the topic but could have provided a more in-depth discussion on the reasons and solutions for changing one's way of life to save the planet.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the discussion would benefit from better organization to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to dramatically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

All children should be given a free laptop when they start high school. Do you agree or disagree?

in many societies, there is a growing emphasis on individualism, with people prioritizing their personal goals and desires over collective interests. Is this a positive or negative development?

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the importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasing numbers of species come under threat what can be done to maintain biodiversity?