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If we want to save the future of the planet, we will have to dramatically change our way of life. What is your opinion?

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At present, the Earth is experiencing numerous problems. There are a number of reasons why and it is believed that changing one's lifestyle will solve the current issues. In
this
 essay, I will talk about my opinion regarding
this
 subject.
To begin
 with, our way of life is always changing, we always adapt to what is new.
With the
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 increasing number of car users, it
also
 added to the present problem of air pollution. If only people
will
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 consider using public transport, it
will
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would
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 definitely lessen the air pollutants
as well as
 traffic.
In addition
, it is undeniable that citizens are fond of using plastic bags and other plastic products. These things are believed to be the number one contributor
of garbages
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. With
this
 issue, the government made ordinances to use paper bags or eco bags on particular days to help lessen the use of the said product.
Also
, there are a lot of organizations that help people be educated about recycling. Like making a pillow out of junk food containers, or making use of an empty soft drinks bottle as an ornament in the house. To end, we owe to our Mother Earth the good things we see and experience. It is our responsibility to take care of it. The future generation depends on what we do now. Let us help them have a life or an even better life than we are experiencing now.
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 current situation on our planet is an eye-opener that we need to move and do something in order for us to save and restore what is left.
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task response
The essay addressed the topic but could have provided a more in-depth discussion on the reasons and solutions for changing one's way of life to save the planet.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the discussion would benefit from better organization to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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