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The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted global appraoach to business and countries that have not.

The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted global appraoach to business and countries that have not.
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The bar chart illustrates the average
increase
 in
GDP
 in wealthy
countries
.The average
increase
 in
GDP
 in rich
countries
 adapting. Globalisers had by far the biggest growth in
GDP
.
While
,
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the wealthy
countries
 experienced
significant
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a significant
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 decrease in
GDP
. Growth rates of
Non-globalisers
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Non-globalised
 fluctuate. There was over 4%
percent
GDP
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of GDP
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 in wealthy
countries
 in 1960. But,the percentage of
GDP
were
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declined significantly to 2% from 1970 to 1990. From 1960 to 1970,there was over 1%
percent
GDP
,
increased
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 to almost 3% in Globalisers. After 10 years, the proportion of
GDP
were
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rised
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raised
rose
risen
 noticeably to over 3%. There was a significant
increase
 in the percentage of
GDP
 in Globalisers from 1980 to 1990. There was
noticeable
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a noticeable
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increase
 in the proportion of
GDP
 from over 2%to 3%
percent
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per cent
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 in
Non-globalisers
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Non-globalised
 between 1960 and 1970. After 10 years, the percentage of
GDP
was
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declined significantly to under 1%
percent
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per cent
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 in
Non-globalisers
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Non-globalised
.
Finally
, there was under 1%
percent
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per cent
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GDP
 increased slightly to over 1% in
Non-globalisers
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Non-globalised
 from 1980 to 1990.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, gdp, countries, non-globalisers, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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