Some people believe that allowing children make thier own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is argued by some individuals that letting
young
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individual
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make their own decisions on
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basis (
such
as
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, attire, and playing) is perhaps leading them to be
individualist
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who only
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about their own desires. Meanwhile, other people think that it is pivotal for
children
to make
choices
about important things that affect them.
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views and I personally think that allowing
children
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their own decision
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young age will help them to be more independent. On the one hand, there are two negative impacts of letting
children
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make their own options.
Firstly
,
children
do not know about the consequences
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choices
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they chosen.
Thus
, parents should supervise them in certain options.
For example
, in terms of food
choices
, most young individuals prefer sweet foods rather than food
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high
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and
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.
Therefore
, parents should make a
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choice
regarding food for their
children
.
Secondly
,
children
also
will think just their own wishes without thinking
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when adults provide
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authority to
children
.
This
means they do not fully understand
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other perspectives.
On the other hand
,
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independency can be trained
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early
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young age starting from parents allowing
children
to make an option about matters. By giving
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authority,
children
will directly know the impact of their own
choices
. After several trials and errors, juveniles will know appropriately which
choices
are good for them. I believe that after
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of
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children
will make their own decision wisely.
This
will lead them to be independent individuals.
To sum up
, allowing
children
to make their own options on
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matters has positive and negative impacts
for
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children
. I believe the positive impact is greater
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children
will be
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independent
due to
learning
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of making
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