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Fossil fuel is the main source of energy. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Recently, some parts of the world
are
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encouraging
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encouraged
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 the use of renewable
sources
 of power as an alternative to replacing fossil fuel as the only
source
 of
energy
. I argue that
this
 is a positive decision to
ace
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address
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 the impact of the environmental crisis.
This
 essay will explain two reasons why alternative
sources
 of
energy
 are needed
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due to
 the limited stock of fossil fuels available in
this
 world and the environmental impact of fossil fuels if not replaced soon by renewable
energy
.
Firstly
,
energy
sources
 based on
the
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fossil
is
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fuels are
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 in crisis after having been used for a long time and they are not renewable. Petroleum is one example of a non-renewable
energy
source
 because it comes from plants and animals that died millions of years ago. When it has been used continuously, it can be predicted
10
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that 10
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 years later we will experience an
energy
 crisis if we are not looking for other
sources
 of
energy
 which are more eco-friendly. When it is too late, the world not only be in catastrophe, but humans will
also
 return to the dark times without lamplight
Secondly
, fossil fuel as a main
source
 of
energy
 is
also
 dirty
energy
. It is called dirty
energy
 because it can produce greenhouse gas emissions that contribute to climate warming.
According to
 a report from the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change, the earth's temperature has increased by 1% from its normal temperature since the era of industrialisation. Having said that, it is important to switch to more green and renewable
energy
such
 as solar, wind and water. Nowadays, we can find many people installing solar panels to create
energy
 to produce electricity in their houses.
To conclude
, there is an urgent need to change our
source
 of
energy
 as fossil fuel as a main
source
 of
energy
 is limited and contributes to climate change. To make it possible, government should take progressive action to create policies that focus on the environment and prioritize clean and renewable
energy
sources
.
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task response
The essay effectively presents relevant arguments in favor of alternative energy sources and their benefits, addressing the question prompt.
coherence and cohesion
The essay follows a clear structure with an effective introduction and conclusion. The development of ideas is logical and well-connected.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is rich, with a good range of vocabulary related to energy and the environment. Some minor errors in word choice and collocations are noted.
grammatical range
The essay demonstrates a good command of complex structures and varied sentence patterns. However, there are inconsistencies in tense usage and a few grammatical errors.
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