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Ques: Being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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Being famous entails a lot to take in. Papparazzis will invade your privacy, people will include your family in bashing, you are expected to behave well in public and so on.
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, being a celebrity has numerous benefits as well. In
this
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 essay, I will tackle the advantages and disadvantages of being a known person.
To begin
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 with, artists and sports athletes are given the opportunity to influence other citizens. People look up to them, follow and purchase what they are endorsing.
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, producers will compensate the celebrities that endorse their products.
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 makes their life financially stable. There was one interview flashed on the television where an actor narrated his story from rags to riches. He is thankful for the opportunities given to him that made his life more comfortable. On the other note, their fans think that just because they are a public personality they don't deserve privacy. There are a lot of occasions where they crash someone else's date. A numerous amount of photos were taken without permission. The worst is that if they are not in favour of the things a body is doing they will criticize and bash it including their families and those close to them. A famous character is
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 expected to behave appropriately in public. There is no room for error as if they are perfect. To end, being a known personality may have a handful of benefits
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 problems but it is up to the person how to deal with the situation.
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