Write about the following topic. An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

More and more individuals reckon that they should proceed a beauty surgery for
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of enhancing their beauty.
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completely disagree with that notion. since these
kind
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kinds
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of
operations
are very risky. On the one hand,
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believe that most of
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these kinds
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kind
of
operations
are really
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dangerous
. sine it
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occasionally
leads to death. if the
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doctor
doctors
did something
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mistake
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mistakenly
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it could
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affect
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negatively on the
pation
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patient
.
then
he will day immediately. because all kinds of
operations
should be very accurate
nethir
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whether
the
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patient
will die or he will suffer from bad
consequances
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consequences
.
for example
, a distinguished singer in
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,
she
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apply
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descided
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decided
to obtain an operation for her noise in sake
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shortage
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.
then
the
doctore
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doctor
by mistake increased the amount of medical
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afterthat
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after that
she passed away immediately. so that
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believe every
persone
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person
should care about his life
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because
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the
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life is very
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precious
and we should preserve it safely.
on the other hand
, cosmetic surge
perhabs
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perhaps
be unsatisfying. since
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several
time
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we heard about people who are made more than 3
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operations
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at
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the same area because the result
not
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is not
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like
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what
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they expected before the
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surgery
.
as
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a result they should do another surgery to fix the impacts that they
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like.
furthermore
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these
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this kind
these kinds
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kind
of
operations
is costly.
for example
lossing
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losing
weight
operations
in Uk around 100000
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. it is
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vast
amoun
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amount
. and people should manage their money in the right way. since that
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drainig
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draining
considared
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considered
wasteful. to
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conclude
, all people should think many
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times
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before
go
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on
these
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kind
or
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of
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operation
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operations
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since
it
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very risky.
furthermore
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it
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considared
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considered
wasteful. it
also
can lead to
the
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death.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cosmetic surgery
  • Appearance
  • Improvement
  • Societal pressure
  • Media influence
  • Self-confidence
  • Self-esteem
  • Physical imperfections
  • Defects
  • Career
  • Professional reasons
  • Advancements
  • Medical technology
  • Accessibility
  • Negative
  • Psychological impacts
  • Realistic expectations
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