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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter explain why you took the job describe the problems that you experienced suggest what could be done about them

#job #company #weeks #manager
Dear Sir, After Greetings I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I recently have been a part of your reputed company as a salesperson. I was more than delighted to get
such
 an opportunity to work over here.
Initially
, it was not to earn money only but
also
 to gain some more knowledge and expertise in sales and customer service.
However
, I have found some difficulties with my job schedule since I am residing way farther than the work location.
In addition
 to that, there are few limited public bus transportation which are always full and I never get a chance to sit on a seat so I have to stand throughout the way.
Therefore
, I would like to request you to change my duty shift in the morning. Because my brother who is
also
 working in another company will drop me here for the work. Should you require any
further
 information please do not hesitate to contact me. Kind Regards Shiba Kumar Banjara
Submitted by Shiba Kc on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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