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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the different changes in metal prices which contain
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 every month in 2014.
It is clear that
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 the
change
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 in the price of
nickel
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 had a dramatic decrease before June and after that,it only rose slowly till December.
However
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, the figure for
copper
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 and
zinc
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 fluctuated
change
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 during the year and
finally
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,all of them outweighed
nickel
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 in December. In January, the price of
Nickel
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 had the highest
change
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 compared with
last
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 previous month in
three
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metals
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,at 6%,and
copper
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 and
zinc
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 stood at just under 2%.Over the following six months,all of these
three
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metals
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 dropped considerably.In June,the figure for these
metals
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 reached the lowest but Nickle was the minimum in
three
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metals
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 which was -3%. After June, the
change
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 in prices of
Copper
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 and
Nickel
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 had a fast increase,which was 1% and -1%.
Then
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,after
three
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 months, figures for these
metals
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 were all unchanged but in December,
nickel
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 rose by roughly 1%,and the figure for
Zinc
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 was up by about 2%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, change, three, metals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • monthly
  • change
  • price
  • metals
  • trends
  • increased
  • decreased
  • fluctuating
  • peak
  • stabilized
  • consistent
  • comparison
  • overall
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