The table below shows percentage of students giving good ratings for different aspects of a university in China in 2000, 2005, 2010.

The table below shows percentage of students giving good ratings for different aspects of a university in China in 2000, 2005, 2010.
The table illustrates the consequence of a survey about five different fields of a university in China in three years 2000, 2005, and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
while
the proportion of pupils giving good ratings for Technical Quality,
Print
Resources
,and Electronic
Resources
rose significantly, the opposite was true for the Range of modules offered.
Also
, the number of
Print
resources
was the highest good voting during the period. In 2000, there was a widespread part of students
voted
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for
Print
Resources
, with 87%, in comparison with 63% voting for Technical Quality and 45% for Electronic
Resources
. Over the next ten years, the percentage of pupils who voted for Technical Quality remained unchanged after 5 years, before rising slightly to 69% in 2010. The statistics for Electronic
Resources
rose by twice times as much as
at the end
of 2010, standing at 89%.
Besides
, nearly the whole votes went
on
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Print
in 2005 but later fell gradually to 91% in the
last
year. Looking at the tables in more detail, the quantity of Range of modules offered was the lowest good voting, with only 33%. After that, it kept on dropping to 30% and 26% respectively
at the end
of the period.
Finally
, it is
also
noticeable that the Building and Teaching Facilities remained stable at 75% in its data of good rating by the pupils throughout the periods.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • student satisfaction
  • university experience
  • surveys
  • facilities
  • policies
  • cultural factors
  • economic factors
  • expectations
  • perceptions
  • reputation
  • improvement
  • significant increase/decrease
  • influenced
  • aspects
  • ratings
  • trends
  • comparison
  • speculation
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