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Some people say that schools should spend more money on computers, others say that more money should be spent on teachers' wages. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#people #schools #money #computers #teachers #wages
the amount of
money
 spent by
schools
 on
computer
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computers
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 or on
teacher
's
salary
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 is a subject that sparks some debates among groups of
people
. as far as
i
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 am concerned
i
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 think the amount of
money
 spent on
teacher's
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teachers'
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 income is as important as improving
school's
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the school's
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 technological
facilities
. nowadays, having access to
latest
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 gadgets and technological tools is an undeniable and essential element of educational environments like universities, colleges and
schools
. the school's budget can be allocated to different
catagories
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categories
 of fundamental needs.
as
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 an educational environment,
schools
 need to consider students' need
to
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for
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facilities
such
 as computers so it is vital to consider a portion of
total
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 budget to answer
this
 demand.
as
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 a result so many
people
 think
schools
 should consider more funds to answer the need of
student
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 to up-to-date gadgets like computers because
this
 kind of gadgets helps students to learn better and faster by using technology and eternal sources of knowledge over the internet
as well as
 developing their abilities to get familiar with technology and its devices.
on the other hand
, some
people
 think that the most important step for
schools
 to take is paying more
money
 to their
teachers
.
as
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 a matter of fact, the amount of tutors' salary plays a pivotal role in their teaching quality and job satisfaction. a
teacher
 worrying about debts and
loan
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 would appear to be an absent-minded
teacher
 who can not focus on teaching to children. regarding
this
, a group of
people
 argue that it is more important to spend more
money
 on
teachers
' income which leads to more job satisfaction and higher education quality so children can be educated by better, healthy and focused
teachers
. in conclusion,
i
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 think to make a space suitable for educating students, all of the aspects
such
 as
teachers
' income and technological
facilities
 should be considered equally. developing the environment
by
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 better
facilities
 and paying attention to
range
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the range
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 of tutors'
salary
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salaries
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 both play vital roles in a high-quality education system so the total fund considered for each educational organization should be equally divided among all the basic and essential
need
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needs
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 of the named place. prioritizing each of
this
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 needs over the other one can lead to an imbalance and low-quality educational system.
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