The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The 1st pictorial diagram illustrates the phases and equipment used in the process of making
cement
and 2nd chart shows how it is Use synonyms
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used for the production of concrete for building purposes.
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Overall
, there are 5 main stages of producing Linking Words
cement
, starting with preparing the natural resources and ending with packing, Use synonyms
while
the production of concrete is quite straightforward with only mixing and rotating.
Commencing with plaster, Linking Words
firstly
, limestone and clay are collected and passed through a crusher to be pulverized into powder. After that, a mixer will be used to guarantee that different substances are compounded well together. Linking Words
Then
, the compound is heated up and rotated in a cylinder pipe. The output of Linking Words
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phase will be rolled out and ground into the expected form which is Linking Words
cement
. Use synonyms
Finally
, the adhesive is packed in bags to be in use.
Regarding the second picture, Linking Words
cement
will be one of the ingredients in the process of making concrete. A compound of Use synonyms
this
mud-like substance is poured into a mixer. In Linking Words
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combination, Linking Words
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only accounts for 15%, Use synonyms
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a half and a quarter of it is gravel and sand, and the rest is water. As the mixer spins around, the concrete is eventually carried out.Linking Words
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