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The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows the number of mobile phones sold by five companies between 2006 and 2012.
Overall
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, Nokia was the leading company at the beginning,
while
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 Samsung showed
a
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strong growth and became the top seller by the end.
In contrast
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, Ericsson and Motorola experienced a clear decline. Apple started later but grew quickly. In 2006, Nokia sold the highest number of phones at 345
million
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, followed by Motorola with 210
million
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. Samsung sold 117
million
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,
while
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 Ericsson had only 74
million
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. Apple did not have sales in that year. From 2007 to 2008,
Nokia
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 sales increased and reached a peak of 475
million
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.
However
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, after that, they started to decrease gradually to 335
million
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 in 2012. Samsung,
on the other hand
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, kept rising steadily from 117
million
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 to 396.5
million
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, becoming the leading brand. Motorola and Ericsson both dropped significantly over the years. Apple began in 2007 with only 2.3
million
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, but its sales increased rapidly to 135.8
million
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 in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual sales
  • fluctuations
  • market saturation
  • technological advancements
  • consumer trends
  • brand dominance
  • growth trajectory
  • market share
  • innovations
  • peak sales
  • decline
  • stagnate
  • proliferate
  • exponential growth
  • market dynamics
  • forecast
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