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The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013.
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The maps display the changes that happened in the layouts of the Nature
Museum
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 during the period of three years.
Overall
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, new types of sections have been constructed over the period
while
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 the Entrance gate and Ticket desk remained the same. In the year 2010,
Museum
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 only consisted of four main areas which were the Lobby, the Ocean hall, Mammals and Dinosaurs. Apart from that, it
also
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 had a nice garden in the outer areas where most of the visitors used to spend their time after exploring the inside of the
Museum
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.
Although
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 in 2013,
Museum
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 has completely renovated into a massive
Museum
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, which contains a bigger Ocean Hall and
also
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 provides an Ice Age area replacing it with Mammals.
Furthermore
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, The Garden was demolished and a new variety of areas have been established,
such
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 as Shop and Cafe has been installed inside the
Museum
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.
Moreover
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, A new room is built which displays Human Origins and beside it, there is the Mammals area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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