IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 1

Sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004

Sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004
#sales #coffee #bananas
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph illustrates the number of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be seen that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
agriculture has and will
continue
Add the particle
tocontinue
show examples
 increase in the future.
While
Linking Words
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 the opposite is true for manufacturing and services. There were nearly 20
million
Use synonyms
 and rose
40
Change preposition
to 40
show examples
million
Use synonyms
 for both manufacturing and services between 1975 and 1980. The manufacturing
sectoe
Correct your spelling
sector
 shows a decrease from 40
million
Use synonyms
 to 10
million
Use synonyms
 in 2025. After 1980, not like
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
manufacturing, the services
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
 and will
dramatic
Change the adjective
dramatically
show examples
 increase to 90
million
Use synonyms
 in 2025. In 1975,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
agriculture was the highest employment in the USA with 80
million
Use synonyms
. From 1975 to 1977, there was
stable
Correct article usage
a stable
show examples
 of 80
million
Use synonyms
. But after 1977, it decreased very fast and in 2025
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
agriculture will have
nealy
Correct your spelling
nearly
 13
million
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by Soobinsj13 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: