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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, crime, detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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Nowadays,
due to
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developement
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development
 of technological gadgets like
computers
, the usage of these facilities increased in all aspects of human
socities
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society
 and they are being improved even more.
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use
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computers
 will reach a more vast
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 era, I think too much dependency on them can
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surpass
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adavantages
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advantages
 and endanger
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humankind
 so in
this
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use
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 and
wether
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 it is
benfitial
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beneficial
 to utilize it more. Technology and gadgets like
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computers
 are developing every day, they get updated from time to time and
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producers and developers are adding new options to these tools. In today's world,
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computers
 are able to maintain so many tasks that used to get done by human power. They are indulged in many aspects of social life
such
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,
aducational
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education
, legal, entertainment, business and so on. It can be expected that
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computers
 play even more vital
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socities
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society
due to
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developement
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development
 speed range, so in
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 future, there would be more fields occupied and handled by
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computers
. The dependency of our kind on tools like
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computers
 has facilitated life for decades since
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 of gadgets were invented and
as a result
, we started to pass more tasks on to
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computers
 to make our lives easier. Now, they are seen in every
organization
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 offices and households and they ease
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maintainance
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maintenance
 of daily personal and professional
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duties
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 of individuals.
However
, I believe that the function of
comuters
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computers
commuters
 and their power should be observed well because
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use
 of them is increasing at a daily pace and there
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 no
boundries
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boundaries
 or restrictions to their abilities.
Also
, so many tasks and duties should be handled by people
due to
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computers
 are unable to understand physical senses or emotions.
To sum up
, I think despite all the threats that are awaiting
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humankind
due to
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 of its tools, there would be more aspects and fields handled by
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computers
 in
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 near time so,
members
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so members
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 of societies need to learn how to utilize
gadegets
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gadgets
 like
computers
 and authorities need to come up with legal and technical limits to control technological means.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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