The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year and the year after it was reffurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied thet were with their visit, during th same two periods.
The given table
illustartes
the number of people who visit Ashdown Correct your spelling
illustrates
Museum
before and after Use synonyms
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museum
redevelopment. The pie charts illustrate the proportion of satisfaction level from the Correct article usage
the museum
museum
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visitors
.
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Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of Linking Words
visitor
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visitors
in
Ashdown Change preposition
to
Museum
rose after Use synonyms
refurbishment
. Use synonyms
In addition
, the level of visitor satisfaction increased after Linking Words
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museum
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the museum
refurbishment
.
Looking at the Use synonyms
infomration
in more detail, Correct your spelling
information
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initially
there are 74,000 people visiting the Ashdown Add a comma
,initially
Museum
and Use synonyms
this
figure went up to 92,000 Linking Words
visitors
after Use synonyms
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museum
redevelopment.
With respect to the results of surveys, 40% and 15% Correct article usage
the museum
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visitors
gave bad responses to the Change preposition
of visitors
museum
before Use synonyms
refurbishment
where they said dissatisfied and very dissatisfied respectively. Use synonyms
However
, those figures declined significantly to 15% of dissatisfied and only 5% of very dissatisfied. In terms of positive survey results, Linking Words
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initially
30% Add a comma
,initially
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visitors
filled satisfied and Change preposition
of visitors
this
percentage rose by 10%. The very satisfied Linking Words
respond
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response
also
increased from 15% to 35%. There are 5% Linking Words
people
who did not fill Change preposition
of people
the
survey Change preposition
out the
in
both before and after Change preposition
apply
refurbishment
.Use synonyms
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