The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year and the year after it was reffurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied thet were with their visit, during th same two periods.
The given table
illustartes
the number of people who visit Ashdown Correct your spelling
illustrates
Museum
before and after museum
redevelopment. The pie charts illustrate the proportion of satisfaction level from the Correct article usage
the museum
museum
visitors
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of visitor
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visitors
in
Ashdown Change preposition
to
Museum
rose after refurbishment
. In addition
, the level of visitor satisfaction increased after museum
Correct article usage
the museum
refurbishment
.
Looking at the infomration
in more detail, Correct your spelling
information
initially
there are 74,000 people visiting the Ashdown Add a comma
,initially
Museum
and this
figure went up to 92,000 visitors
after museum
redevelopment.
With respect to the results of surveys, 40% and 15% Correct article usage
the museum
visitors
gave bad responses to the Change preposition
of visitors
museum
before refurbishment
where they said dissatisfied and very dissatisfied respectively. However
, those figures declined significantly to 15% of dissatisfied and only 5% of very dissatisfied. In terms of positive survey results, initially
30% Add a comma
,initially
visitors
filled satisfied and Change preposition
of visitors
this
percentage rose by 10%. The very satisfied respond
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response
also
increased from 15% to 35%. There are 5% people
who did not fill Change preposition
of people
the
survey Change preposition
out the
in
both before and after Change preposition
apply
refurbishment
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