The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how many people choose a Caribbean
Island
as their holiday destination over a 7
year-period
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year period
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(2010 – 2017),
tourists
had the option to stay either
on
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in
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cruise
shops or on the
island
.
Overall
, the total
number
of
tourists
increased significantly over the period of time,
however
, there was a shift in the
visitors
’ preference between staying on land or on the water. From 2010 to 2015, the total
number
of
tourists
experienced a steady rise, jumping from 1
million
to slightly more than 2.5
million
. During
this
5 years-period, more
visitors
chose to stay on the
island
than on
cruise
ships. From 2010 to 2011, the
number
of on-land
visitors
stayed
over
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at over
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0.5
million
,
while
on-water
visitors
showed a growth, ending 2011 at 0.5
million
. After 2011, the
number
of
island
visitors
continued to rise, reaching its peak in 2013 at 1.5
million
,
while
the figures
cruise
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for cruise
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visitors
shrunk, reaching its lowest
number
in 2012 but recovering from that year onwards. Starting from 2012, the
number
of
visitors
staying on ships steadily increased, outnumbering the on-
island
figures, which declined since the plateau in 2013, between 2015 and 2016. In 2016 the
overall
number
of
tourists
spiked, in the end of the recorded period,
this
Caribbean
Island
was welcoming 3.5
visitors
, out of each 2
million
chose to stay on
cruise
ships and 1.5
million
on the
island
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, tourists, cruise, number, million, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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