the graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
The graph illustrates data about the usage of public transport
in
large Change preposition
by
city
residents
and other residents
by
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in
6
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the 6
age
group
in 2016.
The vertical line shows the percentage of age
group
and the horizontal line depicts different age
groups. In addition
, in both large city
and other Fix the agreement mistake
cities
residents
, in
0-15 Change preposition
apply
age
, the consumption of transportation system
has Fix the agreement mistake
systems
30
% difference. Correct article usage
a 30
Although
, because of the large population in big cities the need of
transportation is remarkable. Change preposition
for
Moreover
, both residential groups have increased in 16
-30 Correct article usage
the 16
age
category but the other group
fall to around 15 ratio in the middle-aged group
. Besides
, large
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the large
city
has picked in
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up
this
age
group
and has grow
consistently to Change the verb form
grown
near
70 per cent. After that, it Change the word
nearly
decrease
Change the verb form
decreases
unexpectably
to 10 per cent Correct your spelling
unexpectedly
use
by Change the form of the verb
used
age
61-75 but rise
to 14% in Change the verb form
rises
elder
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the elder
group
. Furthermore
, other residents
usage has Change noun form
residents'
resident's
remain
Change the verb form
remained
steadily
in both Change the word
steady
31
-45 and 46-60 groups but it Correct article usage
the 31
fall
under 10 Change the verb form
falls
percentage
in Replace the word
per cent
76+
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the 76+
group
.
Overall
, the
public transports are more attractive in large Correct article usage
apply
citys
. Correct your spelling
cities
Moreover
, more teenage and middle-aged people are keen to use them which means as the
people get older the consumption of Correct article usage
apply
transportations
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transportation
decrease
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decreases
exept
Correct your spelling
except
in
big Change preposition
for
city
residents
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, residents, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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