The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

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migration to

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and the time of

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staying

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2000 to 2008 period and the pie chart depicts

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began at 150 .

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