Although modern life has brought with it improvements in people's standard of living, people are not generally happy with their lives. Do you agree or disagree?

It is undeniable that
life
has become more modern and provides more facilities which may affect
people
's standards of living, But some of them feel unhappy with these improvements. I totally agree with
this
statement and I think
this
development
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advantages and disadvantages.
firstly
, research has shown that most countries can not control the number of improved individuals and they can't face the speed of
people
's growth,
this
issue should be fixed to provide efficiency in
people
's
life
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.
For example
, building a huge amount of skyscrapers including offices will
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a significant increase in the residents' population which
cause
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traffic crowding and a noisy environment.
Moreover
, enormous car emissions affect the weather and beauty of our countries.
However
,
people
feel upset about all these situations and they will think about other places to move on so they can have a better
life
.
secondly
, despite that modern
life
is making our
life
easier
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there is one thing for certain that we can not deny which is the capability to face
this
issue. Some
people
are forced to be in the cities so they can get their needs like work, restaurants and general services that are not found outside the country.
For instance
, in some nations like , Singapore the governments donate a high amount of tickets for those who break the law and
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such
as using normal gas
instead
of biodiesel.
Furthermore
, they
build
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a huge zone only for manufacturing and offices that impact the crowded areas. In conclusion, governments and
people
should work in the same team, decreasing the bad habit that relates to the cities and searching for a great strategy to make attractive
people
and make them happy.
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Your essay presents some relevant points but lacks depth and clarity. Make sure to address all parts of the question and provide specific and clear examples to support your points.
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The essay lacks a clear and well-structured introduction and conclusion. Focus on developing a strong introduction that introduces the topic and a conclusion that summarizes key points and provides a final thought.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • fast-paced environment
  • stress levels
  • anxiety
  • social disconnection
  • face-to-face interactions
  • loneliness
  • materialism
  • consumerism
  • temporary satisfaction
  • long-term happiness
  • unhealthy habits
  • physical and mental health
  • environmental degradation
  • disparities
  • social justice
  • income inequality
  • disadvantaged
  • healthcare advancements
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