The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016

The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016
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The presented chart illustrates the average of visitors who came to “birth control, eye, diabetic, and dental” departments every week between 2010 and 2016 in a hospital. Generally speaking, “birth control” and “eye” are
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clinics that had the highest concern compared to the rest.
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, “eye” and “ diabetic” are
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areas that had a significant increase in comparison between the first year and the
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year on the graph. “Birth control” started with the highest which was approximately 245.
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years later, its number increased to about 275 and
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declined rapidly in 2014. Eventually, it ended up with a similar number as 2010. “Eye” began with around 125, went up slightly in 2012, and rose quickly to approach 350 people. In the middle of 2013 and 2014, the was one time, these
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clinics approached the same number. The similarity of “birth control”,
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and “dental”
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in 2010 reached 100 people, and in 2016, it reached about 125. “Diabetic” is quite similar to the trend of “eye” but it changed more steadily. In 6 years, there were 3 times that “diabetic” and “dental” got the same visitors.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words “birth, “eye”, two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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