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International sports events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world.Do you agree or disagree?Support your opinion with relevant examples.

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Worldwide tournaments are greatly appreciated by all nations, they could be the reason that brings the
world
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 together and help to raise
life
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the life
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 standards of
some
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apply
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others.
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 with, most of the individuals around the globe are fans of a different sport,
international
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International
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 contests namely the Football
World
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 Cup or the
Olimpic
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Olympic
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 games to name a couple, reunite all the countries either in a stadium or in front of a screen,
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people
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and people
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 become more friendly and open to
share
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sharing
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 and
admire
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admiring
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such
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 big events.
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,
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this
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these
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 activities could help to promote a more peaceful planet.
Adittionally
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Additionally
, big companies designate considerable amounts of money to advertise, sponsor and support
such
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 competitions. Giant brands
such
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 as Apple, Nike,
Qatar
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and Qatar
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 Airlines, among others,
also
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 donate money to some team foundations
such
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 as Barcelona sports club, Paris
Saint German
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, etc.
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, by promoting sports
people
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 can result benefited from
such
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 donations
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 the economy of the city where the games are taking place.
As
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a
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apply
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conclusion, a better economy
as well as
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 an improvement in
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the life-quality
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life-quality
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life quality
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 of some
people
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 can
be achieve
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be achieved
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 by sports.
Its
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It's
It is
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 been witnessed that
world
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 championships can reunite
people
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 of all nationalities which
signify
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signifies
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 more peace in the
world
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.

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