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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology advancements are surprising humanity every single day, one of the first industries affected by that development was
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printed newspapers, magazines and books. An argument among society was and
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 still is that in the near
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 people will rather have access to free or cheaper online
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 than pay for the printed version.
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 it appears to be tempting, I completely disagree with that prediction. When the advancement in technology started to happen, there was a natural trend of taking advantage and having access to items that not a
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 paid for free. In the beginning, many companies suffered and a number of them had to close
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, the printed business alongside authors, journalists, and other stakeholders fought for their intellectual property and started to develop ways to not only sell the product of their work using the Internet but
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 online after a promising beginning started to experience reduction was twofold.
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, the online version does not have the emblematic smell of the printed ones. Studies carried out by experts found
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that more than 60% of
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commerce consumers prefer to pay more and have the nostalgic smell. The other reason is the vision damage that the light of devices used to read
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online newspapers and books.
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 of the day, not paying or paying less to read
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 on a tablet, mobile phone or computer is, in the long term, more expensive
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 medical bills and glasses that the individuals might need.
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, despite the many advantages perceived at the beginning of the online
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 era, I completely disagree that they are still valid,
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 the printed industry is alive.
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light of the fact that laws and procedures were developed to safeguard the intellectual property of companies and their stakeholders, and the health concern of using a device to read for long periods of time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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