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The graph below hows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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The line graph demonstrates the closing of stores and opening of new stores in a certain country during the period between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, the line plot depicts declining trends with many fluctuations in terms of store closures and openings in the given time.
To begin
 with, 6000 to 7000 shops were closed between the years 2011 and 2014.
In contrast
, from 2015 it takes a big jump and from 2016 to 2018 the closing of the shops stays almost at the same rate. As far as new store openings are concerned, close to 9000 boutiques closed in the year 2011. For that year, the value of shop openings in the new market was greater than the closure of the boutique.
Then
, the chart fell to 4000 in 2012.
However
, there was an average increase in the data and
that is
 from 4000 to 6000 shopping outlets from 2012 to 2014.
Next,
we can observe that there is a drop in the number of the opening of new shops in 2015 and these remained the same for the following three years, before reaching their lowest point of 3000, in 2018.
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