In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is considered that a few countries' organizations provide the facility to
work
remotely, Use synonyms
while
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people
looking forward to working from the Use synonyms
office
. In my opinion, I believe that working from the Use synonyms
office
is essential for the person to improve soft and technical skills together.
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people
who Use synonyms
work
at their accommodation would have sufficient time to complete their tasks. Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
people
can manage their Use synonyms
work
and other Use synonyms
responsibility
simultaneously at home. Fix the agreement mistake
responsibilities
For example
, many countries provided permanent Linking Words
work
from home to their employees during the COVID in India, USA etc. Use synonyms
Moreover
, remote Linking Words
work
is feasible and comfortable for Use synonyms
people
and improves their health Use synonyms
with reduce
travel from one place to another. Change preposition
by reducing
However
, it saves time to manage all the things Linking Words
accordingly
.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
people
who tend to Use synonyms
work
from the Use synonyms
office
have a proper plan to do and manage the tasks Use synonyms
accordingly
. Linking Words
In addition
, Linking Words
people
have to schedule and attend meetings on a daily basis at the Use synonyms
office
and commute with the team members until their Use synonyms
work
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completes
. Wrong verb form
is completed
For example
, Much large organization allows senior employees to Linking Words
work
and manage business meetings at the Use synonyms
office
, which provides Use synonyms
professional
culture and environment to achieve the desired goal. Correct article usage
a professional
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
can receive more opportunities, and learn experiences from their colleagues, which Use synonyms
also
improves their soft and technical skills.
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To conclude
, Linking Words
people
can manage Use synonyms
work
from home and Use synonyms
office
in the same way but working from the Use synonyms
office
is more beneficial for Use synonyms
people
to get a chance to enhance their desired career.
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However
, it will help to improve their productivity and efficiency at Linking Words
work
.Use synonyms
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coherence cohesion
The general logic in your essay seems to be off sometimes. On one hand, you are asserting various advantages of working from home. On the other hand, in your opinion, you are stating that working from the office is more beneficial. This seems contradictory as the advantages of office work aren't mentioned clearly. Please ensure that if you are stating an opinion that seems to counter your arguments, you need to provide strong points to back it up.
task achievement
The task's complete response score is low because the essay lacks clarity on whether the writer supports work from home or the office, making it somewhat off-topic. Also, you need to discuss both views in equal measure, which is missing here. The correct approach would be to choose a stance and then consistently argue in support of this stance, all the while succinctly presenting and refuting the opposing standpoint.
lexical resource
There are several grammatical errors in your essay. For instance, 'people and improves their health with reduce travel', should be 'people and improves their health by reducing travel'. Also, 'Much large organization', should be 'Many large organizations'. Proper grammar is key to expressing your thoughts clearly and eloquently. Therefore, always check for sentence structure, tenses and agreement, prepositions, article usage, and punctuation.
grammatical range and accuracy
You have shown a limited range of grammatical structures and there are quite a few errors in your essay. This contributes to the difficulty in understanding some parts of the text. Remember to vary your sentence structures and use a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences. Also, ensure correct usage of grammar rules.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example