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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart gives a breakdown of the result of a questionnaire about
people
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’s
coffee
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 and tea consuming and purchasing habits in five specific Australian cities: Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart.
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 to go a café for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4 weeks was the highest point in all of
cities
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the cities
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while
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 those of
people
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 to buy fresh
coffee
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 was
the
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at the
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 lowest point in the same period.
Whereas
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of
people
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 to go caffe for both of them almost experienced above a ratio of 55% in all cities,
excepting
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except
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 Adelaide. Those of Adelaide had slightly the same ratio as
people
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 buying instant
coffee
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(around 50%). To
buy
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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, the number of
people
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 had the lowest point (about 32%) in Brisbane
while
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its
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apply
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the highest ratio was 44% in Sydney.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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