The pie chart shows the percentage of person arrested in 5 years

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, it is apparent that the majority of the people arrested were males, and drinking publicly was the most common reason for the arrest among both genders. In detail, 32% of males were arrested which was more than threefolds of the females that were arrested (9%) during the five years. Regarding the cause of their arrest, it can be seen that about 36% of females were arrested for public drinking and

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was higher than the number of males that accounted for about 30%.

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, more ladies were imprisoned for assault and no answer.

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, just above 25% of men were arrested for drinking

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driving and

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was double the percentage of women arrested. Breach of order and theft

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accounted for greater male arrests

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a quite similar number of both sexes were arrested for no reason .

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The pie chart shows the percentage of person arrested in 5 years

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; others believe only governments and large companies can make a difference.

In the past, most working people had only one job. However, nowadays, more and more people have more than one job at the same time. What are the reasons for this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?

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