Childcare is important. Both parents should attend childcare courses To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare
  • Parenting skills
  • Gender equality
  • Child development
  • Co-parenting
  • Work-life balance
  • Cognitive and emotional growth
  • Parental involvement
  • Early childhood education
  • Mandatory courses
  • Support systems
  • Family dynamics
  • Nurturing environment
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