Childcare is important. Both parents should attend childcare courses To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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I strongly agree

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is important, both

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courses

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very important

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should take care

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child

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kids

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study

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as well as

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habits

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parents

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idea

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about what

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kids

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intersted

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interested

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it will help for

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growth

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will help a nation to

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great role. If

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will grow in proper ways

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it will help a lot to a

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Secondly

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apply

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parsent

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parents

should attend

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courses

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so they can understand about

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chidrens

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children

more and more.

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parents

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is attending

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courses

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than

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it will help both

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the

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children

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a parent

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parents

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course help

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a lot

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and make some rules and laws. Government should make some

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for

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developnments

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development

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community

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should help in

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kids

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development.

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courses

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idea.

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parents

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parents

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will attend

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courses

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then

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they can learn more about

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child

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the child

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which will help both

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child

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and a

parsent

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parent

present

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Jul 23, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

215 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Childcare
Parenting skills
Gender equality
Child development
Co-parenting
Work-life balance
Cognitive and emotional growth
Parental involvement
Early childhood education
Mandatory courses
Support systems
Family dynamics
Nurturing environment

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