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Childcare is important. Both parents should attend childcare courses To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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Introduction
I strongly agree
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that
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satement
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statement
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 is important, both
parents
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 should
childcare
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courses
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. I
bleow
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below
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describe
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Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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in
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is
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 very important
parents
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 should take care
about
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there
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a
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child
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.
Parents
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 should take care
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a
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kids
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study
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studies
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as well as
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their
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habbites
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habits
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parents
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 have
idea
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 about what
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kids
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 are
intersted
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interested
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then
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 it will help for
there
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 growth
also
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,
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a children
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children
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 will help a nation to
development
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 more so in
this
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ways
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childcare
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 plays
an
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 great role. If
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 will grow in proper ways
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 it will help a lot to a
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society
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Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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parsent
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parents
 should attend
childcare
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courses
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 so they can understand about
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chidrens
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children
 more and more.
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parents
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is attending
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courses
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than
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then
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 it will help both
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the
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a
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a parent
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parents
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.
Thirdly
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,
thus
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childcare
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 course help
alot
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a lot
. Government should support
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 and make some rules and laws. Government should make some
rule
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rules
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 for
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developnments
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development
developments
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Hence
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,
community
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the community
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 should help in
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kids
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 development.
Conclusion
In conclusion, so, from the above information
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childcare
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courses
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better
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 idea.
According to
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 me, if
a
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parents
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parents
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 will attend
childcare
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courses
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then
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 they can learn more about
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child
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the child
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 which will help both
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the
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child
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 and a
parsent
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parent
present
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Word Count

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare
  • Parenting skills
  • Gender equality
  • Child development
  • Co-parenting
  • Work-life balance
  • Cognitive and emotional growth
  • Parental involvement
  • Early childhood education
  • Mandatory courses
  • Support systems
  • Family dynamics
  • Nurturing environment
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