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The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.

The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.
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The bar chart demonstrates how many
kilometers
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 the passengers commuted by a range of
vehicles
 in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
Overall
, only the
number
 of bicycles and bike
kilometers
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 declined
whereas
 the other
vehicles
 had the opposite trend over the period.
Additionally
, buses and trains are two genres of
vehicles
 customers used most. In 1990, around 6
billion
kilometers
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 was belong to two
vehicles
 that were bicycles and bikes, and
this
 figure fell slightly in 2000.
By contrast
, there was a minimal rise to about 6
billion
kilometers
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 in the
number
 of Ari
kilometers
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 in the final year. Regarding the rest of the kinds of
vehicles
, the
number
 of bus and train
kilometers
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 stood at approximately 45
billion
, three times as much as that of bicycles, bikes, and Ari in 1990. In the next 10 years, the figure for both these
vehicles
 had an upward trend and reached nearly 50
billion
.
Although
 there was a fluctuation between the five
vehicles
, the
number
 of total vehicle
kilometers
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 increased significantly from 100
billion
 in 1990 to 112
billion
 in 2000.
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