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The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.

The bar chart below shows the passenger kilometres traveled by different means of transport in the UK in 1990 and 2000.
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The bar chart demonstrates how many
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kilometers
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 the passengers commuted by a range of
vehicles
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 in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
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, only the
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 of bicycles and bike
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kilometers
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 declined
whereas
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 the other
vehicles
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 had the opposite trend over the period.
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, buses and trains are two genres of
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 customers used most. In 1990, around 6
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 was belong to two
vehicles
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 that were bicycles and bikes, and
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 figure fell slightly in 2000.
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, there was a minimal rise to about 6
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 in the
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 of Ari
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 in the final year. Regarding the rest of the kinds of
vehicles
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, the
number
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 of bus and train
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 stood at approximately 45
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, three times as much as that of bicycles, bikes, and Ari in 1990. In the next 10 years, the figure for both these
vehicles
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 had an upward trend and reached nearly 50
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.
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 there was a fluctuation between the five
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, the
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 of total vehicle
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kilometers
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 increased significantly from 100
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 in 1990 to 112
billion
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 in 2000.
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