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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Nowadays, many
people
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 choose the become homeless compared with other activities. Many options for
people
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 to gain a job who come true benefit,
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 must have over skill and thought competitions. I believe there are many solutions to face the
problem
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. On the one hand. Many
people
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 need our home to gain suitable work with passion.
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 reason is to
fulfill
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 their life. But not all companies can be to provide them.
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, several companies need requirements good,
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 as record education, experience, and good attitude.
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, more solutions to face the
problem
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. So, the cities can be several founds good solve. The solution
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 even given by a person,
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, the government or authority society in their country can be involved
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.
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, The government is always ready for Carina and infrastructure to support good education, internet, and others. The action can
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increase human resources, a result
people
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 are more ready
into seeks
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 a job.
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, every
problem
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so
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must there are a solution, including homelessness.
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, my solution to the
problem
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 is preparation any skill before entering a
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 job.
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, the government as an authority needed to intervene in the place and
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 take regulation for fluently the program.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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