1.Every year more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. Why do you think students prefer to study online? What can universities do to attract students to study on campus?

Nowadays, a great number of students prefer to study online rather than be at traditional
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on campus. In my opinion, they tend to learn
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technological
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way, as it has convenience and flexibility;
however
, by offering new advantages and entertainment, universities can allure youngsters to participate in campus
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.
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meaning. To
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day scenario,
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of technology, people use it almost in every field,
as well as
, students join
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via educational platforms,
such
as Microsoft Teams and Zoom. Especially, after
pandemic
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period, people
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started to
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in studying remotely.
Moreover
, those who would rather attend classes
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video call, claim that they are able to control their daily schedule.
Therefore
, if school-goers take part in networked lectures, they can save not only their time
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but
also
their money. To illustrate, for going
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, most freshmen use public transport, even some of them
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far off
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complex and they spend too much cash
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vehicles.
On the other hand
, by attending university, adolescents may gain various skills, like broadening horizontals, being sociable and having
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.
For
this
reason, institutes should organize activities or they can give chance to students to choose their
lessons
, schedules and even teachers independently.
For instance
, in
Japan
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juveniles have
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to pick up their own sessions and professors. At the same time, they have some organizations, like choosing directors from among teenagers. In a nutshell, though
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aged population would like to continue their education life with technological devices for
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comfortable conditions, universities have to create
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to collect them into auditories, because of its aforementioned advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • E-learning platform
  • Virtual classroom
  • Self-paced study
  • Asynchronous/synchronous sessions
  • Digital resources
  • Webinars and online workshops
  • Interactive content
  • Educational technology
  • Campus amenities
  • Student engagement
  • Collaborative learning
  • Social integration
  • Networking opportunities
  • Experiential learning
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