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2.The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs enormous government expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Social)

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restoration
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 of historical
buildings
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 in main urban areas
in
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worldwide
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 costs enormous government spending .
This
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money
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 should be used
in
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for
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 new housing and highways improvement. I totally agree with
this
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 statement because
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 more
money
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for
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 construct
a
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apply
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new
homes
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 and
roads
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 can provide vital services for individuals
as well as
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 society.
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money
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 for
build
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building
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 more
homes
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 and
roads
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 rather than
restoration
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 of old
buildings
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. Regarding housing,
people
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 in recent time struggle to owing
homes
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.
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 is because the price of
homes
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on
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 cities is extremely expensive .
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, if the government allocate more funds for
build
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building
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a
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apply
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new housing
instead
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 of
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restoration
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the restoration
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 of historical
buildings
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this
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 step can contribute to
make
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making
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 the price of
homes
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 affordable for
people
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 , which
mean
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means
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 more
people
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 will
having
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have
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 houses. When it comes to
roads
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,
allocate
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 more funding for highways can contribute to
address
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addressing
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 the issue of
traffic
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 congestion. To illustrate,
allocate
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allocating
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 more
money
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 for
roads
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 mean more improvements in
roads
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, which
make
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makes
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 it more wide.
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, wide
roads
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 mean
less
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traffic
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 jams.
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, road development can contribute to
increase
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 the safety
in
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 our
roads
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.
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, if the government make improvements
on
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in
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traffic
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sings
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signs
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 and the quality of
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roads
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road
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 materials can lead to
reduce
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reducing
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 the cars accidents.
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,
allocate
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allocating
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 funding for
highways
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highway
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 development rather than
restoration
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 of old
buildings
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 can help to save lives.
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, I strongly believe
allocate
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money
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 for
construct
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constructing
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a
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apply
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new
homes
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 and
roads
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 is
a
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apply
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better than
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restoration
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the restoration
a restoration
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 of historical
buildings
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 because it will make houses accessible for
people
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, and solve the issue related
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traffic
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to traffic
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 jams
as well as
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 safety on our
roads
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.

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