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2.The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs enormous government expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Social)

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The
restoration
 of historical
buildings
 in main urban areas
in
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 the
worldwide
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 costs enormous government spending .
This
money
 should be used
in
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 new housing and highways improvement. I totally agree with
this
 statement because
allocate
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 more
money
for
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to
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 construct
a
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new
homes
 and
roads
 can provide vital services for individuals
as well as
 society.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why I believe the authorities should allocate
money
 for
build
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 more
homes
 and
roads
 rather than
restoration
 of old
buildings
. Regarding housing,
people
 in recent time struggle to owing
homes
.
This
 is because the price of
homes
on
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 cities is extremely expensive .
Therefore
, if the government allocate more funds for
build
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a
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new housing
instead
 of
restoration
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 of historical
buildings
this
 step can contribute to
make
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making
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 the price of
homes
 affordable for
people
 , which
mean
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 more
people
 will
having
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have
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 houses. When it comes to
roads
,
allocate
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 more funding for highways can contribute to
address
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 the issue of
traffic
 congestion. To illustrate,
allocate
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 more
money
 for
roads
 mean more improvements in
roads
, which
make
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 it more wide.
Consequently
, wide
roads
 mean
less
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traffic
 jams.
Furthermore
, road development can contribute to
increase
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 the safety
in
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 our
roads
.
For example
, if the government make improvements
on
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traffic
sings
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signs
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 and the quality of
roads
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road
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 materials can lead to
reduce
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reducing
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 the cars accidents.
As a result
,
allocate
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 funding for
highways
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highway
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 development rather than
restoration
 of old
buildings
 can help to save lives.
To sum up
, I strongly believe
allocate
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money
 for
construct
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constructing
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a
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apply
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new
homes
 and
roads
 is
a
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better than
restoration
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the restoration
a restoration
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 of historical
buildings
 because it will make houses accessible for
people
, and solve the issue related
traffic
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to traffic
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 jams
as well as
 safety on our
roads
.
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