A friend of yours is thinking of going on camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would line to go camping with your friend thi summer

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Dear Ahmed, I

have

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apply

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received your letter

last

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week and came to know that you are planning for camping

holiday

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this

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summer. I am really thrilled to hear about your plan and certainly believe that you have made

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the

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right choice. As you are aware that I had been

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this

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camping

holiday

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apply

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last

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summer,

therefore

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can assure you that

this

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will be

one

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yours

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your

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exciting

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holiday

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holidays

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. There will be many activities for you and your family to enjoy,

for

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instance

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one

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of my

most

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favourite

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one

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was

sand

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the sand

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buggy,

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this

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in this

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buggy you have to drive yourself over

very

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a very

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rugged sandy and rocky track. Another

fun filled

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activity is the bonfire and barbecue which the tour operator will arrange for you, for me it was indeed

very

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memorable activity with mouthwatering food. Based on these facts, I strongly recommend you

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carry out

with

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your plan.

On the

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contrary

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there are some disadvantages which you need to be aware of.

One

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of the big

issue

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I faced was

rain water

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rainwater

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which ruined our enjoyment on that particular day.

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However

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this

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is the part of the camping

holiday

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and you need to turn

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into some kind of enjoyment.

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to that another

issues

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was

continues

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nagging of mosquitoes,

this

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one

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must be taken care

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of by

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having some medicated creams and repellents.

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Also

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I am really thankful to you for inviting me for

this

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trip,

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however

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due

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to my

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official engagements, it would not be possible for me to join you. I know that I am going to miss

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adventure a lot. Wish you good luck and I hope it will be

one

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yours

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your

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memorable

trip

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trips

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, in case of any

query

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queries

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I am always available to answer. Warm regards, Faseeh Khan

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

294 words

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