Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned while others believe that people should be free to choose .discuss bothe these views and give your own opinion

Some people opine that hazardous games should not be allowed to
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,
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others have an opinion that individuals can select their sport as per their preferences.
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essay will elaborate on both viewpoints
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with my perspective
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the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are many factors behind
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theory that games should be played to keep the mind and body fresh and healthy. But some activities are meant to harm individuals. Despite helping them in any conceivable way.
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Sky diving
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skydiving
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and Scuba diving are those
games
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activities
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that can put human health at high risk. As per a recent survey, 82 scuba divers
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missing for the
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4 years.
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,
such
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activities should be banned by the government of the country. On the other side, life is unpredictable. People can indulge in any sport
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their
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. They are fully aware of the consequences happening around the world.
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, every sports activity has its own drawbacks and benefits. Most precious diamonds from the Sea are found by scuba divers.
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, every game is dangerous at its peak level. Shutting down the plays is not the solution to the matter. To summarise, every sport has a danger level.
Government
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should find ways to lower the risk level of hazardous sports
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of banning them.

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task achievement
Your introduction presents both views well, but make it clearer by stating your opinion right away.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your points more clearly, making sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea.
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Include more specific examples and facts to support your arguments.
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You have clearly mentioned both sides of the argument.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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