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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices, to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.?

#people #choices
Some individuals think that in recent times we have too many
choices
. I totally agree with
this
 statement because we have many
choices
 regarding,
method
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methods
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of
communication
,
transport
, and
food
.
To begin
 with , there are several reasons why I believe
today
 we have many
choicess
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choices
 related
way
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ways
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of
communication
,
transport
, and
food
. Regarding
communication
,
today
 we have a chance to stay in touch with loved ones via technology or
in-person
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in person
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.
For example
, we can keep in touch with our friends or families via social media, Facebook, Twitter,
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and Snachat
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Snachat
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Snapchat
, and
also
 we have
chance
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a chance
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 to meet them
in-person
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in person
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on
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at
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café
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a café
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 or restaurant. In comparison , in the past
people
 only can contact
with
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apply
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their friends or families face-to-face. In terms of
transport
,
people
 in
present
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the present
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 time have many methods
to
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of
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 commuting .
For instance
,
people
 can use different forms of
transport
, flight, cars , and trains, which mean these forms of
transport
 make travel more convenient .
In contrast
, in the
pervious
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previous
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 generations
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the
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only way to travel using camels or horses under bad circumstances namely, sunlight . When it comes to
food
,
today
people
 can experience a wide range of
food
 from different parts of the world.
For instance
,
people
 can eat American or
british
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British
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 or Australian
food
, which
mean
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means
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people
 have many
choices
 for
food
. In comparison, in the past
people
 only can eat local
food
.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that
today
 individuals have many
choices
 because we have many
choices
 regarding,
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the way
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way
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ways
show examples
of
communication
,
transport
, and
food
 compared to
pervious
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previous
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 generations.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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