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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently, a new neighbour moved in who has loud parties several times a week. Write a letter to your landlord, In your letter •Explain the situation • Describe why it bothers you • Suggest a solution

#apartment #year #neighbour #parties #times #week #landlord #•explain #situation
I am Puneet Kaur, a tenant in your apartment, located at Smart Vaughan
Metropolitican
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Metropolitan
 Center. Needless to emphasis, there
has
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 been no complaints from the
time
 I moved in. Recently, I
was
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encountered
by
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some
problem
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 and was looking for a positive response from your side. Even Though Aman is a nice person yet he always plays very loud music
specially
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 during the
night
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nighttime
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time
.
Inspite
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In spite
 of getting warned, my housemate commits
same
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 mistake every
time
. Being an international student, I
do
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not only have classes in
morning
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 but
also
 work during
afternoon
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.
Additionally
, Aman does hold noisy
party
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 all night, making it difficult for me to take rest. Honestly, I do not have any problem if Aman can reduce the noise caused by the drums or if he can limit the
time
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 till 11 :30 at night. Hoping, my issues would be addressed as soon as possible.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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