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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Describe the information shown below in your own words.
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The chart informs about the
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 of social and economic for four countries in 1994.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Japan has the highest
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 in the annual revenue per
person
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 with their possible age and reading habit
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 Zaire was the lowest score in all
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. Income per
person
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 was the highest in Japan followed by Canada with 15,760 and 11,100 respectively.
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, their lifespan expectancy was the highest among three other countries which stand at the age of 78. In the daily calorie supply per
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, it was obvious that Canada can provide more calorie supply to their citizen with 3,326 per
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. Canada and Japan stand at the same ratio for their adult literacy rate of 99%.
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, the lowest score for the four
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 occurred in Zaire. Its annual income per
person
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, and life expectancy death were the lowest among other countries with 130 and 47 respectively. Their daily supplies of calories and the adult literacy rate were
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 in the lower bracket with scores of only 1749 and 34.
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