A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: -request advise about a gift for his/her family -ask about activities and clothing in his/her country -find out about the food

#friend #year #visit #country #information #-request #gift #-ask #activities #-find #food

Dear Samantha, How are you now? I hope you are doing well. I am writing

this

letter to

regards

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your invitation to your country. I'

really excited to visit

Hawaii

because

this

is my first time travelling there. Since

this

is the

first,

I would like you

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to share

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some information about

Hawaii

's destination, culture, and how I'

going to visit your house

about

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in about

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weeks

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week

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. Before

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go to

Hawaii

next week, I'

thinking to give some

present

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presents

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for

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your family. I would like to bring some snacks from Indonesia but do you/ your families have any

recommendation

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recommendations

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about snacks or

item

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items

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you really miss from Indonesia? If you have, I would be happy to bring it to

Hawaii

. Despite

Hawaii

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being

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known

about

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for

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many beaches, do they have any priorities destination I should go and how about the

country

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weather? I'

so enthusiastic to visit your country tourism, so I have more preparation about what should I wear and

also

any pieces of

cloths

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I brought to

Hawaii

for 1

weeks

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. At the moment I arrive, could you

helping

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help

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where

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with where

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the foodcourt

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foodcourt

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food court

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or restaurant

that

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apply

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is most favourite? I would like to express

about

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apply

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your kindness to help me prepare. Regards, William

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2Word repetition
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7 paragraphs

203 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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