the line graph below gives information on cinema attendence in the uk .write a report for a university lecture describing the information given.

the line graph below gives information on cinema attendence in the uk .write a report for a university lecture describing the information given.
the line chart compares four different
age
groups
in terms of attending the cinema in the United Kingdom.
Overall
,it witnessed that younger people spend more time going to the cinema than their older counterparts.
Although
the trends of these four
age
groups
revealed a steady increase over the period of time ,except a slight drop between 1995 to 2000. As the graph shows, in 1990, the people of 44 to 54 and 34 to 44 years old both stood at around 37 %.
while
their figure rose by about 2% in 1995 before plunged approximately 5 % in 2000.The proportions of these
groups
increased dramatically by nearly 52% by 2010. Other
age
groups
of 24 to 34 and 14 to 24 years old started off at 23 % and nearly 15% respectively,for cinema-goers in 1990.in 1995 the rate of attendance for the
age
groups
of 24 to 34 increased to 28% ,
while
the other
age
category of 14 to 24 rose slightly to 16%.
however
,from 2000 to 2010 ,both categories of cinema attendance experienced a rocket
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