The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
The given two maps
displays
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about
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apply
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road
access to
city
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a city
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hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Firstly
,
in
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on
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first
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the first
a first
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map
in
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of
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2007 on
north
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the north
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side
there is
ring
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a ring
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road
,
east
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the east
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side
Bus
stop,
west
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the west
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side
is
a
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apply
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empty and south
side
there is
hospital
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a hospital
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road
,
city
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a city
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road
and
car
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a car
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park
for staff and
public
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the public
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, and in
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the centre
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centre
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,centre
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there is
city
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a city
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hospital.
Secondly
, in 2010 in
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the centre
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centre
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,centre
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there is
city
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a city
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hospital there is
ring
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a ring
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road
in
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on
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upper
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the upper
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side
and
in
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on
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down
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downside
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side
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,side
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there is
bus
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a bus
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station, hospital
road
, staff car
park
and
city
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a city
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road
. There is
also
a roundabout.
Thirdly
, in 2010 there is development in
bus
station
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stations
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and public car
park
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parks
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. In conclusion, there is a great development between 2007 to 2010. In 2007 there was a
bus
stop which was
canverted
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converted
in the roundabout. In 2007 there was
public
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a public
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and staff
park
was combien but it was better in 2010.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, side, bus, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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