The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant
The given two maps
displays
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display
about
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apply
road
access to city
hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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a city
the city
Firstly
, in
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on
first
map Add an article
the first
a first
in
2007 on Change preposition
of
north
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the north
side
there is ring
Correct article usage
a ring
road
, east
Correct article usage
the east
side
Bus
stop, west
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the west
side
is a
empty and south Correct article usage
apply
side
there is hospital
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a hospital
road
, city
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a city
road
and car
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a car
park
for staff and public
, and in Correct article usage
the public
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the centre
centre
there is Add a comma
,centre
city
hospital. Correct article usage
a city
Secondly
, in 2010 in Add an article
the centre
centre
there is Add a comma
,centre
city
hospital there is Correct article usage
a city
ring
Correct article usage
a ring
road
in
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on
upper
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the upper
side
and in
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on
down
Correct your spelling
downside
side
there is Add a comma
,side
bus
station, hospital Add an article
a bus
the bus
road
, staff car park
and city
Correct article usage
a city
road
. There is also
a roundabout. Thirdly
, in 2010 there is development in bus
station
and public car Fix the agreement mistake
stations
park
.
In conclusion, there is a great development between 2007 to 2010. In 2007 there was a Fix the agreement mistake
parks
bus
stop which was canverted
in the roundabout. In 2007 there was Correct your spelling
converted
public
and staff Correct article usage
a public
park
was combien but it was better in 2010.Submitted by purvametaliya99 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, side, bus, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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