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The chart bellow shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart bellow shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The presented bar graph illustrates the amount of buying and consuming
such
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 goods as tea and
coffee
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 in 5 different cities of Australia. The survey
also
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 presents 3 categories of
people
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, which were observed in the
last
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 4 weeks. The first thing to mention is that the major part of served
people
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 prefers to use the services of local cafes (the number exceeds 60%) -
such
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 a tendency can be seen almost in all cities.
Secondly
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, analysing another group, it can be said that
people
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 who prefer to buy instant
coffee
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instead
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 of fresh one , are more numerous,
also
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 in all areas.
Further
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 speaking, it should be pointed out that amount of
such
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people
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 (preferring instant
coffee
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) fluctuates by about 50%, and the leader there, undoubtfully, is Hobart.
On the contrary
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, Sydney has the lowest position there. And
last
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 but not least - the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 can be concluded as the smallest in every observed city. And there Sydney and Melbourne absolutely are leaders.
In contrast
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, Brisban and Adelaide take the lowest positions.
Overall
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, it can be said that general consumption and buying habits have the same "shape", the same characteristics in the main cities of Australia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last, such".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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