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Many people believe that children should be taught the importance of money. What is your opinion on this matter? What other value should children be taught?

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Money
 plays an important role in the modern world,
therefore
, some
parents
 consider that they should teach their
children
 the value of
money
.
While
 I accept that students should learn to respect
money
, I
also
 believe that educating
children
 about the importance of reading
books
also
 plays an important role when raising a child. These days, there are many interesting things around
children
 that make them eager to have. That may be a toy, a babe doll or a video game machine which their friends already have so they
also
 want to own one.
Therefore
,
children
 often require their
parents
 to buy it for them even though they have too many other similar things at home or they don’t really need it.
This
 would become bad
habits
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 if
parents
 accept all their offspring’s requests
instead
 of giving them
the
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lessons
of
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 the value of
money
. When the youngsters are fully aware of
this
, they can understand the hardships and sacrifices their
parents
 are making to earn
money
,
as a result
,
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 their needs and
behavior
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. Teaching
children
 the importance of reading
books
 is one of the important values that
parents
 should deliver to their kids at
their
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 early age.
This
 is because
books
 contain a wide range of knowledge in different aspects
in
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of
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 our life which greatly contributes to the development of
children
. By reading
books
,
children
 not only enrich their knowledge through useful information but
also
 nourish their senses
by
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 moral lessons.
Furthermore
, reading habits
is
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are
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 a great way for young people to improve their ability to use a language, learn more vocabulary and considerably enhance their reading comprehension. In conclusion,
besides
 teaching the value of
money
 to youngsters, adults
also
 should help them understand the importance of reading
books
that
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 are essential factors to contribute to
children
's development.
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