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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph illustrates
distribution
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the distribution
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 of average weekly financial
outcome
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outcomes
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 by households in a country between 1968 and 2018.
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 the most significant drop was seen for food expenses,
on the other hand
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, housing and leisure spending improved over the period of 50 years. The main increased spending categories were leisure, housing ,and transport with 9%, 10%, and 8% of weekly income in 1968 respectively. After 50 years, leisure
expense
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expenses
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 replaced food spending as first place with 22% of weekly salary. Housing and transport were inclined by 9%, and 5% by order,
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, became the second and third important categories for spending.
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 of
food
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the food
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expense
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expenses
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lost
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 from 1968 to 2018
,
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 and dropped to nearly 16%. Many expenses
also
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 slightly declined over time
such
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 as fuel and power, clothing,
personal
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and personal
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 goods which were less than 10%.
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, spending
for
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 household goods was not changed between 1968 and 2018.

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