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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the households divide in two
years
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 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the Food average in
this
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 chart was maximum in 1968
while
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 the 2018 year It averaged only 16%.
According to
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 the chart, It was a very difference between both
years
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However
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, It was half less in 2018.
following
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this
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 Leisure was 23% in 2018.
This
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 was increased from past
years
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 and Its average is very good to other items.
Although
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, In 1968 Its only 8%.
Additionally
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, Housing income spent in 1968 was 10% but It increased in 2018 average was 18%. The next category is Fuel and power spent 7% in 1968 and only 3% in 2018.
while
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, families spent
money
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 on Personal goods
also
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 same 3% like fuel in 2018 but, 8% in 1968. Nextly, the Household goods weekly average was almost the same in both
years
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, 7% from 1968 to 2018.
Thereafter
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, families spent
money
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 on clothes and footwear by 10% in 1968 and the year 2018 It averaged a decrease of 5% So, which was half a percentage from past
years
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. In conclusion, Families spent more income weekly , with the highest
money
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 spent on food in 1968 But In 2018 Their preference changed because they spent the highest
money
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 on leisure
according to
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 the other features.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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