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Band 6.5

You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask you landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain. - why you can't pay the rent - when you will pay the rent - How you will ensure you can pay the rent in the future

#landlord #rent #future
Dear Sir or Madam, Let me introduce myself, my name is William
who
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we
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 are living in your apartment on
third
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the third
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 floor with room number
is
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15. I am writing
this
 letter because I would like to draw your permission about my lateness
rent
 payment. Let me explain the reason why I can not pay on time. The first condition was my father got
traffic
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a traffic
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 accident
last
 week and he really
need
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needs
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 an
operation
 as fast as possible.
Moreover
, the
operation
 payment is out of my expectation.
Secondly
, after the
operation
, he
need
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needs
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 to stay at
hospital
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the hospital
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 until 3 weeks. Because of
this
accident
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 I am using all of my
saving
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savings
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 and
also
rent
 money to cover my
father
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father's
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operation
 bills. I would like your permission to give me 2 weeks to cover the
rent
. I will add 2
until
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to
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 3 more jobs to cover my
rent
 as soon as possible. I hope
your
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for your
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 kindness
of
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in
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 my unexpected
conditions
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condition
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. If I can not pay in 2 weeks, I will
out
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be out
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from
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of
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 the apartment and I promise you that in future, I will minimize any possibility
from
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of
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 late payment. I would really
apreaciate
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appreciate
 your kindness in
this
 situation. Yours sincerely, William
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