Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter  suggest a suitable date and time for the party  recommend a venue  propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter with regard to inform you about a special farewell party in next few months. I would organise

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party theme as a colourful night. First of all, I would recommend

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developing

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event

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on Mach 19th

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the same date as our company’s

aniversary

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anniversary

, which is a great time for all employees to

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along with

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my suggestion it would be

greatful

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great

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event

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should start at 7pm. sharp, because they will have some

times

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to get change before the party started.

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the

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place

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suitable

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event

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has been found. The location is the Diamond Star Hotel, because

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is a

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hotel with the best river and city views, and

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has a huge outdoor rooftop to fill up to 100 people maximum.

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, the cost is slightly over the

budgets

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, I would have to negotiate with them and if

everythings

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everything

goes well, I will

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you again.

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that day,

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and

sweet

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are organized by the hotel as there is a famous chef of the world working in

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venue.

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, we should not be

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about

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much, but

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nevertheless

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I provided them to search

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develope

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develop

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more lively. If you have any questions or concerns, Please do not hesitate to contact me

anytimes

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any time

. Sincerely, Cuttareeya

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

233 words

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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can be international community take to make sure the supply of food is enough?